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Friday, February 15, 2013

Story Element #9: Rhyme (Ugly Pie)

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Ugly Pie by Lisa Wheeler (#9: Rhyme)
Today's craft is...RHYME! And the model? Ugly Pie by Lisa Wheeler, illustrated by Heather Solomon. And let me tell ya, it sure is fun to read! Might even smell and taste good, too!


Title: Ugly Pie
Author: Lisa Wheeler
Illustrator: Heather Solomon
Publisher: Harcourt Children's Books
Year: 2010
Word Count: 683
Summary: After baking a scrumptious Ugly Pie, made from ingredients donated by his neighbors, Ol' Bear invites everyone over for a slice.

Now that you know the details and the premise, let's dig in and serve up a healthy heaping of RHYME! Remember, when I share books, I deal with spreads, not pages. It's easier that way. This book isn't one of your normal rhyming books. There's a rhyming refrain (what fun) and the dialogue is in rhyme. You could also study WORD PLAY or DIALOGUE or PACING with this book. Want a copy of my Template for Studying (and Writing) Picture Books? Just follow my blog and leave a comment below with your e-mail so I can send it to you.

Spread 1: no rhyming on this page
Spread 2: a bit of internal rhyme: "hitch of his britches" Rhyming refrain (Ol' Bear's song):
"Sweet molasses, my-oh-my.
I'm itchin' for some Ugly Pie!"
He goes to Grampa's house and says:
"My-oh-my-oh-my!
Do I smell Ugly Pie?"
And Grampa says:

"I don't have no Ugly Pie,
but you should give my pie a try..."
Spread 3: Here we have alliteration and repetition.
"...my pleasin' pumpkin pie!"
"That sure is one plump and pleasin' pie," Ol' Bear said.
"But I'm just itchin' - truly itchin' - for some Ugly Pie."
Spread 4: Ol' Bear's song gets a little longer:
"Ruby raisins - not too dry,
sweet molasses, my-oh-my!
But I'm still itchin', sniffin', wishin'
for some Ugly Pie!"
So he goes to another family member's house, and they have their same rhyming exchange about trying their pie, but...
Spread 5: Ol' Bear keeps responding with his same ol' rhyme about really wantin' his Ugly Pie.
Spread 6: And the song gets longer...
"Got the apples of my eye,
Ruby raisins - not too dry,
sweet molasses, my-oh-my!" [gimmee, gimmee, some ugly pie...]
Spread 7: another pie rhyme
Spread 8: the song, changed a bit (two rhyming couplets)
Spread 9: no rhyme
Spread 10: Song changes. (I can't keep quoting ever single rhyming bit, ya know.)
too/wa-hoo!
satisfy/ugly pie
Spread 11: Some serious word play rhyme
mixin'/fixin'
makin'/bakin'
itched/twitched
sang/rang
Spread 12: a little rhyming pie conversation where people smell his pie baking
Spread 13: the final song WA-HOO!
too/do
try/pie
Spread 14: (a bonus) THE RECIPE!!!

TODAY'S QUESTION(S): What's your favorite pie? and...What's one of your favorite rhyming books? 

Remember, EACH comment (one per day) is a chance to win one of two Market books.

Keep on keepin' on...

3 comments:

  1. Hmmmm. My favorite pie? So many, but probably Lemon Meringue. My favorite rhyming book, other than my own as-yet-unpublished ones, is The Fly Flew In by David Catrow. Very funny and cute with good rhyme and alliteration. I reviewed it last year for the Sacramento Book Review and, if you aren't familiar with it, you can read my review here: http://citybookreview.com/2012/09/the-fly-flew-in-i-like-to-read/

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  2. I love pumpkin and my own homemade apple pie! A great rhyming book is definitely The Three Ninja Pigs by Corey Rosen Schwartz. And I'm not just saying that because I know the author. It has fabulous rhyme and lots of fun word play.

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  3. Apple pie! What a super book you found for rhyme. Thanks, Christie.

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